I am a Year 6/7 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 9 and my teacher is Roya. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Ka pai, good work sharing your descriptive writing Tevita. I like how you described the colours of the scene. I wonder what other adjectives and figurative language you could use to help your reader feel like they are there?
Kia Ora Tevita I like your descriptive writing but I think you could improve your writing skills and maybe add a little more detail in it and it would be better.
Hi Tevita I like you did your writing it is very descriptive I think it should be a bit longer like what the other people said other then that have a great day.
Ka pai, good work sharing your descriptive writing Tevita. I like how you described the colours of the scene. I wonder what other adjectives and figurative language you could use to help your reader feel like they are there?
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DeleteKia Ora Tevita I like your descriptive writing but I think you could improve your writing skills and maybe add a little more detail in it and it would be better.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Tevita I like your descriptive writing, but you could make it longer and I like how all the slides are different colours.
ReplyDeleteHi Tevita I like you did your writing it is very descriptive I think it should be a bit longer like what the other people said other then that have a great day.
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